I wrote a personal narrative about a memorable experience I had in high school. My peers reviewed it and I review it for errors. The following essay will explain the errors that were found in the personal narrative I wrote. In order to make this grammatical analysis easier to understand, I am going to break it down into five error categories: morphological errors, lexical errors, syntactic errors, mechanical errors, and stylistic choice errors.
1. Morphological Errors:
Morphological errors are errors that occur with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, determiners, and noun endings. This narrative had two morphological errors. The first example, “Our band director had assigned me to a ...view middle of the document...
” The addition of a comma between “arrived” and “we” would make this sentence correct. The third example, “I made it through the parade without any major incident but was soaking wet when we finished.” Adding a comma between “incident” and “but” would make this sentence correct. The fourth example, “Not having a good spot to put my bra I asked Brent if he would put in his pocket, as it wouldn’t fit in mine.” Adding a comma between “bra” and “I” would make this sentence correct. The fifth example, “About a week later during band class our director stands up in front of the whole class and says he has made “a discovery”. Adding a comma between “class” and “our” would make this sentence correct. The sixth example, “Brent Rogers, can you come collect your bra from my office please?” Adding a comma between “office” and “please” would make this sentence correct. Lastly, “When I look back on it now it seems hilarious however at the time it was very embarrassing.” A comma between “hilarious” and “however” would make this sentence correct.
4. Mechanical Errors:
Mechanical errors are errors that occur with punctuation, spelling or capitalization. There were two mechanical errors in this narrative. The first example, “After a lot of fundraising and even more preparation, the JCHS Marching Band and the color guard decided to make the trip to Florida for the parade.” Capitalizing “color guard” would correct this mechanical error. The second example, “Not having a good spot to put my bra I asked Brent if he would put in his pocket, as it wouldn’t fit in mine.” Adding the word “it” between “put” and “in” would fix this mechanical error.
5. Stylistic Choice Errors
Stylistic choice errors are errors that are choices by the author in writing style; however, they make the narrative hard to read. This narrative had two stylistic choice errors. The first was a stylistic lexical error, “It didn’t, the rain continued to pour.” The word choice of this sentence can make...